后羿射日初二英语作文

Question

从前天上有十个太阳，天气是如此的炎热以至于庄稼干枯，动物死亡。人们生活的很艰难。有一个年轻人叫后羿，他擅长射箭。人们请求他把多余他把多余的九个太阳射下来。于是后羿登上海边的一座高山，射掉了九个太阳，人们非常高兴。后来他和嫦娥结婚了，过上了幸福的生活
Once upon a time there were ten suns in the sky, the weather is so hot that the crops withered, the death of the animal. The people live very hard. There is a young man called Hou Yi, he's good at archery. People asked him to spare him the nine extra sun down. Hou Yi then climb a mountain near Shanghai, shot down nine of the sun, people were very happy. He and her married, lived a happy life
把这段英语改正一下语法错误再改成初二水平

Answer 1

Once upon a time there were ten suns in the sky. The weather was so hot that crops withered, animals dead. People lived very hard. There was a young man called Hou Yi who was good at archery. People asked him to spare him the nine extra sun down. Hou Yi then climbed a mountain near Shanghai, and then shot down nine of the suns. People were very happy. He and her wife married, and lived a happy life.

总体来看，run-on 非常严重。不。要。总。用。逗号。

Houyi born with genius archery talent, when he was grown he got amazing arm strength and superior arrows skill. Back at the time there were 10 suns, strong sunlight scorched the earth, crops were burn to wither, almost to melt even the stones, and the sea was boiling up. People couldn't breathe in the hot air, the beast took the opportunity to come out to harm humans. Houyi felt sorry for the people in agony, determined to risk his life to help people out from harm. This man was good at archery, he selected a highland point, took the bow and arrows, shot to the sky, Just a loud noise "bang", one of the suns was shot and fell. Houyi shot out nine arrows in a row, nine suns were falling down one by one. When he wanted to re-shoot and get the last sun down, he suddenly thought, if there was no sun, the earth will be all in the dark, humans wouldn't survive, then he left the last sun on the sky, let this sun benefit the mankind.

Answer 2

Once upon a time there were ten suns in the sky, the weather is so hot that the crops withered, the death of the animal. The people live very hard. There is a young man called Hou Yi, he's good at archery. People asked him to spare him the nine extra sun down. Hou Yi then climb a mountain near Shanghai, shot down nine of the sun, people were very happy. He and her married, lived a happy life