有没有人帮忙修改下初中生英语作文啊!!~~

My name is Da Ming. My birthday is the 25th of December. It’s the Christmas day.
You know it’s also the birthday of a scientist Newton .He is a prodigy. So I have a clear head . Too.
I am a girl with short hair and I wear a pair of glasses. It doesn’t mean that I am a bookworm. In fact ,I don’t like reading books. I’m very naughty and dreamy.
There is the blue sky with white clouds .

I like the sky that NO.2 Middle school has.
If god gives the wings to me. I will be glad to fly in this beautiful sky.

We’re very lucky to be in the Class 14.

We will fighting.

第1个回答  2009-08-28
I am a girl with the name of Da Ming. I was born on the Christmas day which is the same day of Issac Newton, the Great scientist. Tell you a truth, I think I have a similary part between us, that is we both have a clear mind.
The one who has short hair and wears glasses is me, you may be fooled by my look and think I am a bookworm. In fact, I don't like reading books, instead I am naughty and dreamy.
I am a student of No.2 Middle School, I love the azure sky and the floating clouds upon my school, and I dream to have a pair of wings so that I can fly in this beautiful sky.
I think we're very lucky to be in the same class of 14.
We will do our best, Trying.
第2个回答  2009-08-28
细节性建议
第一段有点罗嗦,直接写
I was born on the Christmas day.即可本回答被网友采纳
第3个回答  2009-08-28
"I am a girl with short hair and I wear a pair of glasses"可省略第二个I,不必重复使用
第4个回答  2009-08-28
初中生写得不错了~~~
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