Limiting the Use of Disposable Plastic Bags 作文修改

Question

1.一次性塑料袋的使用
2.使用一次性塑料袋带来的问题
3.限制一次性塑料袋的意义

要求 120字左右 四级标准

Limiting the Use of Disposable Plastic Bags
With the development of the science and technology , more and more disposable plastic bags are brought to our attention owing to its convenience. Once they were used widely.
As the saying goes: every coin has two sides, Recently, the issue of pollution which was made by disposable plastic bags has been brought into public focus. It has the following advantages. Firstly, it arise a series troubles from energy sources to water pollution ,and air pollution. Then, what is more ,it is harmful to human’s health
限制一次性塑料袋的意义 不太懂要怎么写。

Answer 1

修改如下：
Limiting the Use of Disposable Plastic Bags
With the development of science and technology, more and
解释：science and technology是固定短语，其前面不用加the.
more attention has been brought to disposable plastic bags owing to
解释：“越来越多的塑料袋”不妥，应该是“越来越多的注意”更妥！
its convenience since they were used widely.
解释：此句上下连接有问题，可以用since引导的时间状语从句。此时，主句必须改用现在完成时。
此段稍显单薄，应适当增加对塑料袋的方便性及其目前使用的广泛性的描述。
As the saying goes: every coin has two sides. Recently, pollution
解释：主语用pollution即可，以对应下句的it.
which is made by disposable plastic bags has been brought into public
解释：定语从句的时态用一般现在时更好，因为这是现在存在的普遍情况。
focus. It has the following harm. Firstly, it arouse a
解释：此段讲的是其污染的harm“害处”，不是advantages.
arise是不及物动词，此处应该改为及物动词arouse“引起/唤起”。
series of troubles of many factors from energy sources to water
解释：固定短语 a series of“一系列的”；且此处troubles和from无法连接。
pollution and air pollution. Then, it is harmful to human’s health as well.
解释：两者并列用and即可；what's more和then重复，改用as well“也”。

注：至于“限制一次性塑料袋的意义”，楼主可以从其危害处着手，当然最好去参阅一些参考资料。我就不越殂代疱了，请原谅！

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Answer 2

With the development of the science and
technology , more and more disposable plastic bags are brought to our attention owing to its convenience. As the saying goes: every coin has two sides,Once they were used widely,many bad effects were also brought into our daily life
.
Recently, the issue of pollution which was made by disposable plastic bags has drawn a lot of public attention. As far as I am concerned,disposable plastic bags have the following disadvantages. Firstly, they arise a series of troubles from energy sources to water pollution ,and air pollution. What is more ,they are harmful to both human's health and the environment due to their poisonous chemical compositions and refractory quality.
All in all,it is high that we should take some effective measures to limit the use of disposable plastic bags for the benifits of ourselves and later generations.