英文语法问题

Question

Today's world, all the rapid development of advanced science and technology to people's lives had a profound effect, which greatly improve our way of life. By computer technology, represented by the development of information technology is changing, from all affected and changed our lives, of which the development of computer network technology more rapidly, has penetrated into every aspect of our lives, people are left no open computer network, and with the rapid popularization of the Internet, to our learning and living conditions lead to greater convenience, we have contact with the outside world will be more close and fast.
Currently, most domestic enterprises to establish a computer network, network applications sizeable, especially in numerical computing, information management, office services, engineering (product) design, manufacturing and so on have been by the computer application, computer, network and databases are becoming business day to day running of the foundation.The LAN is an importance that calculator correspond by letter the net to constitute the part ，is a foundation to constitute all network. All at because of with function that net realizes, can realizes on LAN, if you want the real control network with make use of the network and then must start from LAN. The actuality inside LAN is all like that, only have real the oneself begins to do, you can't just feel not seen before, hard comprehension. This paper is from the effective demand of the business enterprise, designed to transact the LAN, give the network construction of the LAN, the already set, customer's machine that include the lead-in network, synthesize the hardware choice of the cloth line, LAN and connect into the already set, server net card of the commutation machine of choice, server of already set and so on.
求教英语达人！！这一段我从谷歌翻译来的，有没有语法问题。有的话请给出指正！！谢谢了。。
中文：当今世界，各种先进的科学技术飞速发展，给人们的生活带来了深远的影响，它极大的改善我们的生活方式。在以计算机技术为代表的信息科技的发展更是日新月异，从各个方面影响和改变着我们的生活，而其中的计算机网络技术的发展更为迅速，已经渗透到了我们生活的各个方面，人们已经离不开计算机网络，并且随着因特网的迅速普及，给我们的学习与生活条件带来更大的方便，我们与外部世界的联系将更加的紧密和快速。
目前，国内各企业大都建立了计算机网络，网络应用颇具规模，特别在数值计算、信息管理、办公事务、工程（产品）设计、加工制造等方面基本实现了计算机应用，计算机、网络和数据库正在成为企业日常运行的基石。局域网是计算机通信网的重要组成部分，构成所有网络的基础。在因特网上实现的功能，都可以在局域网上实现，本文从企业的实际需要，设计了办公局域网，给出了局域网的网络结构，包含了无线网络、综合布线、局域网的硬件选择、接入交换机的定型、服务器网卡的定型、客户机的选择、服务器的定型等。

Answer 1

当今世界，各种先进的科学技术飞速发展，给人们的生活带来了深远的影响，它极大的改善我们的生活方式。
Nowadays,with the rapidly development of science and technology,there is profound effect on our lives which have been greatly improved.
在以计算机技术为代表的信息科技的发展更是日新月异，从各个方面影响和改变着我们的生活.
cause of the development of information technology represented by computer technology,especially the development of internet,our lives changes day by day.
而其中的计算机网络技术的发展更为迅速，已经渗透到了我们生活的各个方面，人们已经离不开计算机网络，
Currently,internet is all around us,it become an indispensable part of our lives.
并且随着因特网的迅速普及，给我们的学习与生活条件带来更大的方便，我们与外部世界的联系将更加的紧密和快速。
下面直接来了~
With the rapid popularization of the Internet,we got great convenience to our learning and living.We are all connected,close and fast.
Today,most domestic enterprises have been establish the net of themselves on a large scale,especially in numerical computing, information management, office services, engineering (product) design, manufacturing and so on.Computer applications, computer, networking and databases are becoming the cornerstone of enterprises.LAN is an important part of communication network,basis for all.All Function implemented on the Internet, can be implemented on the LAN also.In this paper we design an office local area network that structure is given include Wireless networks, cabling, LAN hardware options, access switch setting, the server network card's setting, the client's choice, the server setting, etc.

Answer 2

我看过了，语法问题在第二段
第一句，改成Currently, most domestic enterprises establishing computer networks and sizeable network applications, especially in numerical computing, information management, office services, engineering (product) design, manufacturing and so on.by the widely-using of computer application, computer, network and databases are becoming business day to day running of the foundation.
还有第二句改成The LAN is an essence that calculating correspond directly with the net to constitute the part ，which is a foundation to constitute all network.
第三句开头改成All because of the function that net realizes
第四句中间改成only have the real oneself begining to do
结尾改成you can't just feel invisible before,that is hard comprehended.
第五句后半改成giving the network construction of the LAN,and already have set customer's machine that include the lead-in network,while synthesizing the hardware choice of the cloth line.LAN has set the connection, server net card of the commutation machine of choice,and server that already set and so on.

说实话。。后一段完全是乱的，我改了之后还是有些乱，但至少好多了，建议以后别用GOOGLE翻译。。可以直接网上找人翻译。。。
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