请帮我修改英语作文，这是我写的，总分25分，我才拿了12分，同学错了很多都16分，所以我想知道里面的问题

Question

希望大家帮我修改下吧，并且告诉我错的原因，因为我最想知道的就是原因。介绍Lucy每年在她妈妈生日那天常做的事情。Lucy很爱她妈妈，每年在妈妈生日那天，她都很乐意去做以下的事情：1：早上为妈妈煮早餐，2：中午去商店挑选生日礼物，3：晚上帮妈妈做家务，4：睡觉前唱歌给妈妈听，讲笑话逗妈妈开心。要求：1:：不少于50词，2：为了使短文内容连贯，你可以适当发挥。Lucy loves her mother very much.Every year on her mother's birthday,lucy always cooks breakfast for her mother in the morning.In the noon,lucy always chooses a present.In the evening,lucy always does some housework、sings songs and tells jockes for her mother.And sometimes lucy buys a cake for her mother.Lucy is very happy and her mother is very happy,too作文就是这样，我已经写了很多了，也累了，希望大家认真帮我寻找里面的大问题，为什么说大问题呢？因为小问题不至于扣那么多分，你们都知道的

Answer 1

1. noon 应该是at noon.
2. 在这里一般不用chooses, 用select更好些。
我简单的改一下你看看：
Lucy loves her mother very much. Every year on her mother's birthday, Lucy always cooks/prepares breakfast for her in the morning. At noon, Lucy goes and selects a present in a shop for her mother. She always does some housework in the evening and sings songs, tells jokes for her mother. Sometimes She buys a birthday cake for her mother. Lucy is very happy and her mother too.

追问

1呢我的确是错了，2呢，他这个有标明 choose a present这个单词的，还有就是select我没有学过哦，呵呵谢谢你的回答，可以的话仔细点寻找吧，因为错一个不至于才12分（总分25分）

Answer 2

Lucy loves her mother very much.She always want to give her mother the best present.
Every year on her mother's birthday,lucy cooks breakfast for her mother .ATnoon,lucy always chooses a present.In the evening,lucy always does some housework,sometimes lucy buys a cake for her mother,then light the candle and sing songs to wish her mother happy forever.When they went to bed, Lucy makes joke for her mother.They laugh and happy in their sweet dearm.
To give lover some good emotion, it makes.Lucy happy and so does her mother.来自：求助得到的回答

Answer 3

最大的问题是文章太单调，报流水账。

追问

我刚刚初一而已，没有什么好的文采啊，其他同学也差不多，但他们却高分，我想寻找的是和他们不一样的原因

Answer 4

很好啊，看卷老师有问题

追问

这个我也不知道，老师看了我的作文，什么也没有说，就走了，我又不敢问她，因为我上课时没有十足的把握是不敢回答问题的，说明我害怕老师

Answer 5

乏味，没有新鲜感