帮忙看一下我写的这篇英语作文有什么重大语法错误,帮忙改一下,提一些写作建议。万分感激。(四级作文)What the drawing vividly depicts is that people play computer in modern life when working,playing,staying at home or sleeping.The picture illustrates that the time of people play computer increasingly than before.Playing computer account for more time than before.
This no deny that computer have important impact in modern life.It can broading our horizon,working efficultly communicating conveniencly.Whereas,this is a largely harm to our eyes because play computer long time.We concentrate on computer,ingoring other interesting incidents.
To sum up,this is a life if quickly rhythm. Computer is a necessary sector in modern life.Computer makes our life conveniencly.Whereas,we can't several rely on it.