假设你是李华，是一名高三学生。你的同班同学王强因患白血病（leukemia）而住院，目前已经花光了家里的所

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假设你是李华，是一名高三学生。你的同班同学王强因患白血病（leukemia）而住院，目前已经花光了家里的所有积蓄，现在需要骨髓移植（bone marrow transplant）, 需要20万元。请你帮他写一封求助信。要点如下：对病人的简单介绍；目前的困难；希望得到捐助；联系电话：白天5221600；晚上5221610注意：1.词数100左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。Dear friends, I’m very sad to tell that________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours truly，Li Hua

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Dear friends, I’m very sad to tell you that my classmates Wang Qiang, a senior high student, suddenly fell faint when he was preparing the coming college entrance examination. He is suffering from a serious disease “Leukemia”.He has been in hospital for about three months and spent all the money his parents saved. Wang Qiang is a top student in our class,but he is in hospital now. He is in urgent need of a bone marrow transport. However, his family is too poor to afford the expenses, which total 200000 yuan. How can a poor family afford such high expenses. But time is life, we can’t wait to see such a sunshine boy lose his life. So your help is badly needed, Let’s do whatever we do to save our fellow student. The life of a lovely boy is in your hand. Your love can save a life. You can contact 5221600 in the daytime and 5221610 at night. Yours truly, Lihua

试题分析：这是一篇提纲式作文：题目已经交代的具体情况，也给了适当的要点，因此考生首先要根据所给提纲，列出要点，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，适当增加细节，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当。语言力求准确、简洁。根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性。考生必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等 【亮点说明】He is in urgent need of a bone marrow transport. 这句话用了词组in urgent need of “急需“However, his family is too poor to afford the expenses, which total 200000 yuan.这句话有非限制性定语从句和和too…to…结构。Let’s do whatever we do to save our fellow student这句话用whatever引导的名词性从句，这些都使得这篇范文读起来顺畅