雅思写作范文精讲：独居的好坏

Answer 1

　　在雅思写作中经常会考到分析利弊的 文章 ，那么你知道如何写独居的好坏吗？下面我给大家带来雅思写作 范文 精讲：独居的好坏。

      【考官范文精读】9分雅思大 作文 深度讲解——独居的利弊

　　In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

　　构思过程：

　　独居，也就是一个人生活，显然有利有弊，如果选择一边倒观点显然都站不住脚，很难论证，需要分开讨论平均用力。主体段一段写好处，一段写坏处。抽象类话题往往在寻找观点上比较困难或者没有方向，建议大家按照文波雅思教授的 方法 分类提取观点。本篇考官分别从个人和经济的角度出发，层次分明论证清晰，值得大家学习。

　　Introduction

　　1)背景导入，说尤其在发达国家的大城市，最近几年独居变得更为常见。

　　In recent years it has become far more normal for people to live alone,particularly in large cities in the developed world.

　　(句型结构：It adj. for sb. to do sth. 后置状语补充，注意完成时has become;注意particularly的用法，举特例方便直接，类似especially但语气更强; in the developed world比in developed countries更地道;far more修饰normal代入感强)

　　2)观点句，我认为这个趋势的影响好坏各半。

　　In my opinion, this trend could have both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.

　　(句型结构：简单句 后置状语;虚拟语气could have;consequences高分词;in equal measure高分搭配)

　　Main Paragraphs 1

　　1)段首概括，一个人住在个人和宏观经济上都有好处。

　　The rise in one-person households can be seen as positive for both personal and broader economic reasons.

　　(句型结构：被动 后置状语并列;主语the rise in one-person households替换more people choose to live alone，地道高分搭配准确;seen as语法得分点;personal & broader economic词汇得分点)

　　2)分论点1：个人层面上，独居的人可能变得比和家人一起住的人更独立自强(常见观点)

　　On an individual level, people who choose to live alone may become more independent and self-reliant than those who live with family members.

　　(句型结构：前置状语 主语who从句 谓语比较级 宾语who从句，高分复合句;self-reliant高分词，展示词汇量)

　　3)举例论证 线性推理展开：独居年轻人需要 学做饭 ，做家务，付账单，管账等重要的生活技能;这样的人增加了就是种正面的发展

　　A young adult who lives alone, for example, will need to learn to cook, clean, pay bills and manage his or her budget, all of which are valuable life skills; an increase in the number of such individuals can certainly be seen as a positive development.

　　(句型结构：主语从句 插入语 不定式并列 宾语all of which从句;简单分句 被动;valuable得分词;an increase语法得分点;such individuals指代准确，语法和词汇得分点)

　　4)分论点2：经济角度上看，独居的趋势会导致住房需求增加(加分观点)

　　From an economic perspective, the trend towards living alone will result ingreater demand for housing.

　　(句型结构：前置状语 后置定语 简单句;trend towards living搭配准确，词汇和语法得分点;result in学术搭配，词汇得分点;demand for housing词汇得分点)

　　5) 举例说明展开：这样会让建筑公司，房产中介和 其它 依赖业主购买产品的公司获益。

　　This is likely to benefit the construction industry, estate agents and a whole host of other companies that rely on homeowners to buy their products or services.

　　(句型结构：简单句 宾语并列 宾语that从句;likely to benefit学术搭配，词汇得分点;construction industry & estate agents展示词汇量;rely on homeowners词汇得分点)

　　Main Paragraph 2

　　1)段首概括：上述个人和经济的论点可以反向考虑;(简介易懂，挂钩前文暗含对比，CC满分技巧)

　　However, the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle.

　　(句型结构：转折 简单句被动;given above非谓语修饰，语法得分点;be considered from学术搭配，词汇语法得分点;the opposite angle词汇得分点)

　　2)分论点1：和独立的好处相比，独居的人会感觉孤独、隔离和不安(常见观点)

　　Firstly, rather than the positive feeling of increased independence, people who live alone may experience feelings of loneliness, isolation and worry.

　　(句型结构：前置状语 主语从句 宾语并列;rather than无痕迹对比，语法和CC得分点;loneliness & isolation高分词)

　　3)举例对比 论证展开：他们错过了家人或室友提供的对话和支持，还要承担过重的家庭账单和职责;这样来说，这个趋势就是负面的

　　They miss out on the emotional support and daily conversation that family or flatmates can provide, and they must bear the weight of all household bills and responsibilities; in this sense, perhaps the trend towards living alone is a negative one.

　　(句型结构：简单句并列 宾语从句 简单分句;miss out on地道搭配;emotional support, daily conversation & flatmates词汇加分点;bear the weight of高分搭配，词汇得分点;a negative one指代准确避免重复，语法得分点)

　　4)分论点2：从经济角度来说，住房需求增加会推高房价和租金(加分观点)

　　Secondly, from the financial point of view, a rise in demand for housing is likely to push up property prices and rents.

　　(句式结构:前置状语 简单句;the financial point of view替换an economic perspective;likely to push up学术搭配;property prices & rents词汇得分点)

　　5)对比论证 说明展开：虽然让企业获益，但大众包括独居的人都要面临更高的居住成本

　　While this may benefit some businesses, the general population, including those who live alone, will be faced with rising living costs.

　　(句式结构：让步句 插入语补充 被动;be faced with地道搭配;rising living costs词汇得分点)

　　Conclusion

　　1)一句话 总结 ：独居增加对个人和经济影响有好有坏

　　In conclusion, the increase in one-person households will have both beneficial and detrimental effects on individuals and on the economy.

　　(句式结构：总结 简单句 宾补;detrimental不利的，高分词，beneficial & detrimental替换positive & negative;两个on介词 短语 并列，语法得分点)

　　评分

　　TR: 两面观点完整回答问题，分论点详实有深度，首尾段观点总结到位，9分

　　CC: 全篇结构清晰，整齐，行文连接通顺，易于理解，没有明显模板痕迹，9分

　　LR: 词汇非常多样，同义替换到位，搭配地道准确，9分

　　GA: 句型多变，复合句实用灵活，没有语法错误，9分

　　(13 sentences, 306 words, band 9)

　　雅思写作高分范文：独居的利弊

　　More and more people are living by themselves today. What are the advantages of living alone? What are the disadvantages? Write an essay of about 250 words explaining the advantages and disadvantages.

　　You come home alone after a long day at work. You open the door to your home. No one is there. Is it blessed silence you hear - or echoing emptiness?

　　Millions of people who live alone today may have either experience. Some love living alone, yet others wish they didn't have to.

　　When they open that door at night, people who live alone do not have to put up with demands or listen to someone's noise or meet anyone's dinner deadlines. They do not have to debate about which TV program to watch or stay off the phone because someone else is expecting an important call. No one else messes up their kitchen.

　　But when they are sick, no one else will bring them an aspirin or call the doctor. Preparing dinner for one can be difficult, and eating dinner for one night after night can be very lonely. Perhaps no one really cares what they did all day. If they are feeling sad, there may be no one to cheer them up. Some people who live alone say the worst times come when something very good happens because there is no one to share the joy.

　　During the course of a lifetime, one may sometimes live with others and sometimes live alone. Each way of life has its advantages. Learning to take advantage of them is one key to contentment.

　　雅思写作题目：越来越多的人独居是好还是坏?

　　雅思写作题目：

　　In some countries,more people choose to live by themselves in recent years.Why is the case?Is it a positive or negative development for the society?

　　解析：

　　11月19日的写作题目是关于“居住方式”的话题：有些国家，越来越多的人愿意独自住，而不是与父母、孩子、配偶生活在一起(甚至终身不结婚)，请问这个是好还是坏?这是个彻底的旧题，以前多次原题出现过，比如2013年4月13日、2013年8月3日、2014年9月27日。相关的话题也频繁出现，比如2012年7月12日“大学生该住在学校还是住在家里”、2014年9月4日“因特网时代我们住在什么地方都不影响我们的工作和生活”、2016年4

　　月2日“多民族的人住在一起是好还是坏”等。

　　关于居住方式的问题，我们应该怎样解题呢?首先，从物质层

　　面，独自居住可以给我们自由的空间和时间，我们想干嘛就干嘛，比如不扫地，不洗碗，房间乱糟糟都不用担心，但这种自由的代价就是可能养成一些不好的习惯;其次，从心理层面，独自居住可能让我们心理很放松，但是如果长期一个人住，就可能失去社交的能力;最后，从社会层面，独自居住虽然减少了人与人之间的冲突，但也给社会资源增加了负担和压力。

　　高分范文及笔记：

　　Today,more and more people,especially in developed countries,choose to live alone.Some even go so far as to live all by themselves even if they have a spouse.Obviously,the benefits of living alone are multiple:freedom to come and go as you please;the space and solitude all to yourself;kingly or queenly domain over the bed.However,as far as I see it,all these benefits do not come without prices.

　　(1)本段给出背景，描述问题，然后给出自己的观点：点出人们独住的理由(多种好处)，并提出这些好处是有代价的。

　　(2)go as far as to do...竟然到了做......的地步(3)multiple(=many)多重的，很多的(4)solitude独处;孤独(5)all to oneself独自拥有的(6)domain领地，范围

　　(7)apparently表面上地;似乎，好像

　　To begin with,as TV has taught us once and again,the single-occupant home can be a breeding ground for eccentricities.In a sense,living alone represents the self let loose.In the absence of anybody else and his/her watchful eyes,the solo dweller is free to indulge his or her odd habits:no dish washing after dinner,standing naked in your kitchen at 2 a.m.,eating peanut butter from the jar,and so on.You may do these things again and again until it is too late for you to make a change.

　　(1)本段讨论独处的代价之一：养成怪习惯。先提出观点(独处养成怪习惯)，接着讲因果关系(因为独处就代表一个放纵的自我，没有人监视)，然后，举例有哪些怪习惯(不洗碗、裸身站在厨房......)，最后总结这些习惯不易改变。

　　(2)本文需要不断提及“一个人住”、“独居”等意思，读者可学习如下表达法，在恰当的地方进行替换：the single-

　　occupant home一个人住的家;the solo dweller独居者;to live alone一个人住;to live all by himself一个人住

　　(3)breeding ground滋生地;温床

　　(4)eccentricity怪异之处

　　(5)let loose释放;放纵

　　(6)indulge沉溺

　　Then,for people who are comfortable and even good at living alone,there is often another concern:a fear that the concrete has set,so to speak,on their domestic habits and that it will be difficult to go back to living with someone else.A friend of mine got married after having been single and living by himself for many years,only to find that he was always quarreling with his wife because,in his words,she was constantly picking faults with his habits and lifestyle.It is not until a long time later that he realized he had to give up those oddities he picked up when he was living alone.

　　(1)本段讨论独居的代价之二：无法再与其他人共处。同样，先提出观点，接下来论述，然后举例。

　　(2)concern担忧

　　(3)concrete混凝土

　　(4)so to speak打个比方;就好像

　　(5)domestic habits家居习惯

　　(6)only to find...却发现......

　　(7)pick faults with挑刺

　　(8)oddity奇怪的习惯;怪异之处(=eccentricity)

　　It is,of course,a matter of personal preference whether one chooses to live all by himself or with his friends or family members.If he finds freedom more important than anything else,living alone

　　is certainly a good choice.It would be the best choice of his if he understood how to avoid the perils,too.

　　(1)本段为结尾段，先提出是否独居是个人选择，接下去总结独具的好处，最后提出独居者应该意识到并避免独居的危险。

　　(2)personal preference个人偏好

　　(3)peril危险(=danger)