请大家帮我修改一下我的英文自我介绍！

Question

Good morning,my dear teachers.I am very glad to be here for the interview.
First,let me introduce myself.My name is ******,27 years old.I was born in Heilongjiang Province.In 1998,I entered ****** University,majoring in Chinese Language and Literature.During my college life,I studied hard and took part in various activities.I gained the scholarship every semester and joined the Chinese Communist Party.
After my graduation in June,2002.I came to Beijing.I have been teaching Chinese in ******* school.In the past half years,I have been preparing for the Postgraduate Examanation while working.Though my work is very busy,every day I feel very tired after off duty,but I insist on studing till deep night.What’s more,I didn’t leave for even one day.Just in order to implement the dream of entering the Beijing Language and Culture University.Now all my hard work has got a result since I have a chance to be interviewed by you.
As a young people,I think I’m really open-minded and quick in thought.I’m diligent,earnest,confident and very fond of new things.I like making friends and communicating with others.During the process,I learnt how to keep a good relations with others.I also have some hobbies,such as reading books,listening to music,swimming and dancing,surfing the net.What’s more,I like playing table tennis the most,I won a lot of honors in table tennis matches in University.I also like English very much,and had passed Band Six in University,but I do think it is still a long way to study,so I wouldn’t give up my English study and improve my oral and listening ability.As the saying goes,”Live and Learn.”I will never stop studing.
As a full-time high school teacher,relative to students in college,I have sacrificed much on my way to study.I believe it is worthwhile,I think that one will easily lag behind unless he keeps on learning,and I believe working hard will finally be repaied.
Ok,that’s all.Thank you for your attention!

Answer 1

I was born in Heilongjiang Province,too. So we are Fellow villagers. I think your introducing is very good. and it needn't to be reversed.

Answer 2

1.共产党是CPC Communist Party of China
2.half year不加s
3.研究生入学考试是Graduate School Entrance Exam
4.Though my work is very busy... 改成Though I was very busy and felt very tired after work every day ,I insisted on studying till late night.
5.have passed 不是had ;六级还是说CET-6 比较好
6.quick in thinking
7.there is still long way to cover
8.compared to students in college,I have sacrificed much in the process of persuing postgraduate education
9. I believe it is worthwhile ,and I think one person will easily fall behind unless he keeps learning.I think all the hard work will finnally pay off.
10.implement 改成realize