请教英语高手.翻译
If you don't mind, allow me make a few comments on this diary.
Hopefully, my comments could help you improve your writ-ing skill.
First of all, I want to say that I am impressed, because I could see your courage and determination.
It must not be easy for you to write it in plain English. But it definitely is a good start.
And I believe your writing skill certainly can be improved with more practises.
Secondly, I would like to make a few suggestions for the mistakes you made in this diary.
Try to write a complete sentence. It's very difficult for non-native speakers to write
it correctly for the first time. So Learn to rewrite your sentence, edit them.
Thirdly, it's a very important recommendation, which is to try not to think of Chinese
when you're writing diaries, articles, or papers in English.
In the past, I also made the same kind of mistakes as you make now.
And it will turn out to become a Chinglish, which is either English or Chinese.
The important thing is that native speaker will not understand your writing if you
write Chinglish.
Regarding to the issue you mentioned in the dairy, I am not qualified to give advices,
but I surely wish any danger will stay away from you, and be safe.
Sincerely,
Shawn
希望我的意见可以帮助您提高写作技巧。
首先，我想说，我留下深刻的印象，因为我可以看到您的勇气和决心。
它必须是不容易为你写的简单易懂的英语。但它肯定是一个好的开始。
我相信你的写作技巧肯定能提高更多的做法。
第二，我想提出一些建议，你的错误在这方面的日记。
尝试写一个完整的句子。这是非常困难的非母语写作
正确首次。因此，了解重写你一句，编辑它们。
第三，这是一个非常重要的建议，这是不会去想中文
当你写的日记，文章，或论文的英文。
在过去，我也作了同样的错误是你现在。
它将成为成为中式，这是英文或中文。
重要的是，母语将不会明白你的写作如果您
收件中式。
关于你的问题中所提到的奶制品，我没有资格给意见，
但我肯定希望任何危险会远离你，是安全的。
此致，
萧恩
为你写的简单易懂的英语实在是不容易。不过这肯定是一个良好的开始。我相信通过更多的实践肯定能提高你的写作技巧.
第二，我想提出一些关于你日记里错误的建议.第一次用外语写出一个完整正确的语句是非常困难的事情.所以,你应该在真正理解之后改正并重写一遍.
第三，这是一个非常重要的建议，当你写英文的日记，文章，或论文时不要在脑子里去想中文.(在脑子里搜索合适的外语单词和句式).
我在过去也犯了和你现在同样的错误.
于是成为了介于中文和英文之间的中国式英语.
可问题是，如果你写成中国式英语的话,以英语为母语的人将不会明白你写的文章.
至于你的问题中所提到的奶制品，我没有资格给意见，但我肯定是希望你会安全的远离任何危险.
此致，Shawn
