雅思作文批改！帮忙了谢谢！最好是老师~(给个分数，谢啦）

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Recent research shows that the majority of the criminals who are set into the prison continue crime after they are set free. What do you think in the case？ What should be done to solve the problem?

In many countries, prisoners who set free by prison continue to commit crime has received a great amount of attention. As for the case, there are several factors and possible solve measures.

Firstly, the reason for this problem may involve social confidence for the criminals who are set free from prison. Some companies would not like to employ the people who commit crime. Moreover, some prisoners have no diploma and specialized knowledge. Employers are lack of confidence for the people who are set into the prison before hunt for job. The confidence crisis as result of the criminals has to continue illegal activities for their feature lives.

Secondly, the criminals are lack of family care, the prisoners have different family backgrounds, family broke have possible to be a factor which led to commit crime again after they are sat free, their families have no able to encourage them. Because the loss of family care, the prisoners will possible, suffer from psychological problems such as feeling lonely and boring in their lives.

From my point of view, regarding to the two factors, several solutions should be considered. Although the criminals doing some illegal activities before they are set into prison, society and family should more care abort their lives after they are set free. Some social worker should help the criminals who leave the prison remedy psychological problem, and their families should more encourage and understand their correct idea for lives.

Answer 1

帮你简单改了下，大概在4.5分左右,注意语法细节，不要犯低级错误，如主谓一致等，还有一个句子让人读不懂，这个扣印象分的，用词方面比较简单，如果能使用点高级词汇也有利于加分。有问题可以再问
Topic
Recent research shows that the majority of the criminals who are set into the prison continue crime after they are set free. What do you think in the case？ What should be done to solve the problem?

In many countries, prisoners who set free by prison continue to commit crime has received a great amount of attention. As for the case, there are several factors and possible solve measures/solutions.

Firstly, the/one reason for this problem may involve social confidence for the criminals who are set free from prison. Some companies would not like to/are reluctant to employ the people who /has committed a crime. Moreover, some prisoners have no diploma/s and specialized knowledge. Employers are lack of confidence for the people who /have been set into the prison before hunt/ing for job. (The confidence crisis as result of the criminals has to continue illegal activities for their feature/future lives.)

Secondly, the criminals are lack of family care, the prisoners have different family backgrounds, family broke(/broken families might be a possible explanation for them committing ….) which led/lead to commit crime again after they are sat/set free, their families have no/not been able to encourage them. Because the loss of family care, the prisoners will possible/possibly, suffer from psychological problems such as feeling lonely and boring in their lives.

From my point of view, regarding to the two factors, several solutions should be considered. (Although the criminals doing some illegal activities before they are set into prison,) society and family should more care/care more abort/about their lives after they are set free. Some social worker/s should help the criminals who /just leave the prison remedy /their psychological problem/s, and their families should more encourage/be more supportive and understand their correct ideas for lives.

Answer 2

不错 但文章还要写的在细致一点再接再厉 给个90分吧

Answer 3

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