(20140109)一道高中英语书面表达题，盼您详细指点评改，谢谢!!

Question

Wonderful life
A man who wants to get happiness and live in a wonderful life can’t live without love. As for me, a kind of love is friends’ help. Now let me tell you the wonderful life I have experienced.
One day, I ran on a sports field with one of my friends. All at once, I was tripped by a stone, and I fell down on the ground. Because of the field has many sharp small stones, I was badly injured. My friend was astonished by the accident at first, but after a while he sent me to a hospital nearby and contacted with my parents rapidly. By nowadays, I’m still grateful to him for his calm attitude and careful treat.
Looking back on my past few years, friends gave me so much help that I could get over difficulties which I had to face with.. With their help and love, I will keep walking firmly whatever difficulties I will experience in the future. Besides, I believe that I will finally see a wonderful rainbow after the rainy days!

Answer 1

Wonderful life
A man who wants to get happiness
and hava a wonderful life can’t live without love. As
for me, friendship is a special kind of love important in one's life. <Now let me tell
you about the wonderful life I have experienced.?> strange
One day, I
ran on a sports field with one of my friends. All at once,
I tripped on a stone, and fell down on the ground.
Because the field has a lot of sharp and loose stones, I was
badly injured. My friend was shocked by the accident at
first, but after a while he called an ambulance/accompanied me me to a hospital nearby and
contacted my parents rapidly. Till now, I’m still
grateful to him for his calm and caring attitude when I was helpless.
Looking
back over the past few years, I have had many friends assist me in life so
that I could get over the difficulties I had to face.
With their ever present support and love, I will be able to face any obstacles life throws in my path in the future. <Besides, I
believe that I will finally see a wonderful rainbow after the
rainy days!>i don;t know

astonished: good way
shocked: bad way

追问

看不明白您想表达的意思。能用汉字配合讲解一下吗？

追答

我就是修改了点点。。。就是最后一个句子我觉得奇怪。
还有你查看astonished 的用法。 是好的意思-surprised, amazed... 之类的。
奇怪的用法。。 一般没看过或读过这样的

Answer 2

Wonderful life
A man who wants to get happiness and live in a wonderful life can’t live without love. As for me, a kind of love is friends’ help. Now let me tell you the wonderful life I have experienced.
One day, I ran on a sports field with one of my friends. All at once, I was tripped by a stone, and I fell down on the ground. Because of the field has many sharp small stones, I was badly injured. My friend was astonished by the accident at first, but after a while he sent me to a hospital nearby and contacted with my parents rapidly. By nowadays, I’m still grateful to him for his calm attitude and careful treat.
Looking back on my past few years, friends gave me so much help that I could get over difficulties which I had to face with.. With their help and love, I will keep walking firmly whatever difficulties I will experience in the future. Besides, I believe that I will finally see a wonderful rainbow after the rainy days!

Answer 3

看了一点，不想看了，，，
就说一句，第一句live in a wonderful life ，实际上应该没有in的，这个没有介词的