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Sloth, is not what we need
Have you ever study until midnight or even later because you didn’t organize your time well? Have you ever copy others homework because you didn’t do yours? Have you ever sleep until noon and missed a important meeting? That’s all because of sloth. One of the seven deadly sins. Sloth is undesirable, Sloth is the avoidance of physical or spiritual work. It can kills your future without your notice. Sloth is a sin, and we must overcome our slothness today, otherwise we will destroyed by our laziness.
First of all sloth is bad for our health.From a research of Leicester University investigated activity levels among more than 3,500 pupils from five inner city secondary schools in Leicester and found that children face years of ill health because they are not active enough. Laziness is a huge problem for teenager’s health. They’d rather play computer games for 3 hours than play basketball or other sports for 1 hour. “They are like a stone sit on a chair when they are playing computer games.” Sit on a chair without moving for 3 hours is unaccetble for teenagers. They must have a rest after each half hour when they are using computer. Sloth can kill you by your health problem, it can also kill your future.
“Diligence overcomes difficulties, sloth makes them.” By Benjamin Franklin. A famous American scientist, philosopher, inventor and writer. I’ve read Benjamin’s autobiography when I was young. Benjamin is avoid of sloth when he was very young. He gets up very early in the morning and start his daily work. Franklin is not successful accidently, his good hobbit lead him to success. As a teenager, I was really bad on this. I m more like a last minuter. I did most of my assignment the day before it due. That makes my assigenment get low marks and make me sleepy the second day. So I can not concentrate on class. That’s a vicious circle, It makes my mark lower and lower.Sloth do not only undesirable for iindividual person, it’s also bad for our society.
One of the biggest stories in UK elections in recent years has been people not bothering to vote. General election turnout fell to 71 per cent in 1997, slumped to under 60 per cent in 2001 and only just scraped above 61 per cent in May 2005. People do not vote for their government election because of their laziness. People don’t vote for their government because they think their vote can not effect the result of the election. Yes, one out of a million is a minor number, but what about a million people have the same thought? All of them don’t vote can make this country in danger. In the other hand, if workers are too lazy and don’t concentrate on their building job. The result may be serious buiding collapse. Sloth can cause very serious society issue, it should be consider by the government.
还有个结尾百度知道说太长了 补充出来
Sloth is a sin, sloth is not what we need. It can kill you, even kill your society. But you can kill your slothfulness easily. Just keep in mind sloth is not good for you, and believe yourself you can beat your laziness. A huge problem is solved by you easily.

Answer 1

Sloth, is not what we need .
Have you ever studied until midnight or even later just because you didn’t plan your time well? Have you ever copied other's homework because you didn't do yours? Have you ever slept until noon and missed an important meeting? That’s all because of sloth. One of the seven deadly sins. Sloth is undesirable, sloth is an avoidance of physical or spiritual work. It may destroy your future without being noticed. Sloth is a kind of sin, thus we must overcome our slothness right now, otherwise we will be ruined by our laziness.
First of all sloth is bad for our health.From a research of Leicester University investigated activity levels among anout 3,500 pupils who are from five inner cities's secondary schools in Leicester we can figure out that children face years of sick conditions because they are not active enough. Laziness is a big problem for teenager’s health. They’d rather play computer games for 3 hours rather than playing basketball or doing other sports for an hour. “They are just like stones sitting on chairs when they are playing computer games.” Sitting on a chair without moving for 3 hours is unaccetble for teenagers. They must have a rest after every half hour when they are using computers. {Sloth can kill you by your health problem, it can also kill your future.} (这句话很别扭并且和前面有重复建议删掉)
“Diligence overcomes difficulties, sloth makes them.” By Benjamin Franklin. A famous American scientist, philosopher, inventor and writer. I’ve read Benjamin’s autobiography when I was young. Benjamin got avoid of sloth when he was very young. He got up very early in the morning and then started his daily work. Franklin was not successful accidently, his good hobbits leaded him to success. As a teenager, I am really weak on this. I'm more like a last minuter. I did most of my assignments the day before it’s due. That makes my assigenments get low marks and makes me sleepy on the second day. So I can not concentrate on my courses. That’s a vicious circle, It makes my scores lower and lower.Sloth do not only undesirable for iindividual person, it’s also bad for our society.
One of the biggest stories happened in UK elections in recent years was that people gelt bothered to vote. General election turned out fell to 71 percents in 1997,it slumped to under 60 percents in 2001 and it only just scraped above 61 percents in May 2005. People do not vote for their government because of their laziness. People don’t vote for their government because they think their votes can not effect the result of the election. Yes, one out of a million is a minor number, but what about a million people have the same thought? All of them refuse to vote can make this country in danger. On the other hand, if workers are too lazy and don’t concentrate on their building jobs. The result may lead to serious buiding collapses. Sloth can cause very serious social issues, it should be considered by our government.
Sloth is a very sin, sloth is not what we need. It can kill you, even kill our society. But you can also kill your slothfulness easily. Just keep in mind that sloth is not good for you, and believe that you yourself can beat your laziness. A huge problem will be solved by you easily.
PS:好辛苦啊，终于搞定了
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Answer 2

果然很长