自己写的公共英语3级考试时口语的自我介绍请大家帮我改改

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过几天参加公共英语口语考试 这是我自己写的自我介绍 准备考试时说的 这中间肯定有错误的地方或者不足 请大家帮我改正一下 或者一些句子过于简单 请大家帮我改的复杂点 或者需要增加哪些话 应该减少哪些话 请大家指导我 先谢谢了 要是对我有帮助一点加分！ good afternoon!dear teachers. my name is wangliang.today i am very glad to introduce myself to you.i hope i can make a good performance today. i am 22 old.born in shanghai.i have a lot of interest.such as singing.play basketball and making friends and so on. i have a happy family.Including my father, mother and me.i love my parents very much. i am a happy boy.i am open-minded.quick in though and very fond of history.frequently i exchange ideas with my family and classmate. thank you for your listening 我感觉自己说的有点少 自我介绍时间是2分钟 麻烦大家帮我加点句子

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good afternoon!dear teachers. my name is wangliang.today i am very glad to introduce myself to you. i hope i can make a good performance today.（这句删掉吧，现在不是表演噢） i am 22 years old. I was born in shanghai which is located in the east coast of China . I graduated from XXX universty in 2010. I am presently working in Shanghai XXX company. (附加教育背景和一些现在的情况也是比较必要的） My hobbies are singing,playing basketball and making friends. My strengths are I am a optimistic person and very open-minded and I love history very much. I have a happy family and there are three people in my family including me. They are my father, mother and me. I love my parents very much. What's more, we frequently exchange ideas about the things which we come across difficuclties with each other. (家庭情况一般放在最后才讲） Thank you for your listening. 我推荐个有免费的英语水平测试的网站给你吧。 http://panettiere.e-say.com.cn/apply7/ 想知道自己英语口语水平的可以去试一下，帮你测试的外教会根据你的表现有及时反馈的.希望可以帮到你。