求高手帮忙看看英文的自我介绍？。请帮忙修改错误地方！

Question

谢谢！面试要用的。。所以请保证正确率。。谢谢！
看看哪里有语法或用词错误！帮忙修改下！谢谢。。。
修改满意的。。加分。。谢谢！

Good afternoon, my mane is XX. Today I participate this interview . First i want to say thank you for giving me the chance. It is really a great honor to have this opportunity for the interview, i would like to answer whatever you may raise, and i hope i can make a good performance today. Now i will introduce myself briefly. I am a 19-year-old gril who would graduate from shanghai nanhu vocational school in 2009,my specialty is Aviation service. I spent about 3 years to learn sth that i would need in the work in the future. Such as electrionic ticket, security check,and anything else and so on. In the school my nearly all school record was fine. Besides, i have got many diploma before. They are all writed in my resume. All of these was credited to my earnest . In addition, i am a person who has responsibility and conscientious . Generally speaking ,i am a hard working student especially do the thing i am interested in. I will try my best to make it perfect no matter how difficult it is.

可以顺便提供我些。。。自我介绍比较好的句子。。用词的。。或可以涉及写的方面。。。好的加分！谢谢。。！

Answer 1

Good afternoon。

I am XX. Thank you for giving me the opportunity. It is really a great honor for me to have this opportunity for the interview.

The following is my brief introdution. I am 19 years old and currently study in Shanghai Nanhu Vocational School and will graduate in 2009.

My specialty is air attending service. In the past three years, I worked hard for acquiring some skills and preparing myself for the future career, such as understanding e-tickets, about security check, and other flight-related subjects.

I have very good study records in school and I will continue to prove my capability in learning in the remaining two years. I am also a responsible and conscientious person with a warm heart. As a service-oriented person, I understand well on customers' needs.

Generally speaking, I am a hard working student especially in doing things I am interested in. If I am given the opportunity, I will do my best to complete all assignments no matter how difficult they would be.

Thank you.

记住要好好读顺它。坚持每天读15分钟，把语感练出来。祝你好运！

Answer 2

1.I participate in this interview
2.my speciality(特色)
3.I spent about 3 years learning what I would need in the work in the future
4." In the school my nearly all school record was fine"病句 改为my score on study is good in the school
5.diplomas
差不多吧~~