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The Water Pollution In My Hometown
I was born in Jiangyang.Here is my hometown.In the past,here is a village.There are only small houses field and beautiful environment.With the rapid development. The geat changes have taken place in my hometown .But so many problems also come in the train of it.The most serrious problems is water pollution.Many chemical factori produces terreble water.andponr it in the river.And so many people throw litter aroundand waste water.Because df these,the water what can drink has become less and less.The most fish in the river have gone death.However,not all people know water is a very important thing of everyone.At the end,I hope the poeple all over the world can save the water.

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