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Question

随着网络的发展，目前很多人给好友发电子贺卡。请更具以下提示阐述电子贺卡的优越性。
1. 除图像外，还可以传递动画和声音，生动，有趣；传播速度快；
2. 形式多样，还可以Flash或其他软件自己设计贺卡
3. 节省纸张，有利于保护环境和树木
With the wide use of Internet，a increasing number of people prefer to send electronic cards to their friends to convey their wishes or feelings
There are many advantages in it，You can not only send pictures, but also can send vivid animations and interesting sound. These messages can be sent to others within seconds when you click it on the screen. What’s more, you can use Flash or other Microsoft to design your own electronic cards which have many different kinds. Most importantly, using electronic can save a large number of paper, which can contribute to protecting trees and environment.

Answer 1

建议修改如下
With the wide use of the Internet，an increasing number of people prefer to send electronic cards to their friends to convey their wishes or feelings
There are many advantages in it. You can send not only pictures, but also vivid animations and interesting music. These messages can be sent to others within seconds after you click them on the screen. What’s more, you can use Flash or other software to design your own electronic cards of different kinds. Most importantly, using electronic cards can save a great deal of paper, which can contribute to protecting trees and environment.

Answer 2

With the wide use of the Internet，an increasing number of people prefer to send electronic cards to their friends to convey their wishes or feelings
There are many advantages in it. You can send not only pictures, but also vivid animations and interesting sound. These messages can be sent to others within seconds after you click them on the screen. What’s more, you can use Flash or Microsoft to design your own electronic cards of different kinds. Most importantly, using electronic cards can save a great deal of paper, which can contribute to protecting trees and environment.

Answer 3

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