求英语大神帮忙看看这篇短文有没有语法错误，有的话在哪里，谢谢~~

Question

有好心的人帮我看看这篇短文有没有语法错误，什么地方有错误，非常感谢！
One of China’s renowned dancers, both at home and abroad, Yang Liping is from the Bai ethnic group. She has won a reputation for being the Spirit of Dance due to her charming performances, such as The Soul of the Peacock, Two Trees, and Moonlight.
　　Although born in Dali, at the age of nine Yang moved with her family to Xishuangbanna. Because of her extraordinary gift, she was chosen to join the Xishuangbanna Song and Dance Troupe when she was 13 years old. She became famous overnight for her performance in the Dai dance drama, The Peacock Princess. In 1988, she entered the China Central Song and Dance Ensemble of Nationalities. At the Second National Dance Contest, her dance The Soul of the Peacock, that she choreographed and performed herself, outshone all the other dances and reaped two first prizes, one for choreography and the other for her performance of the piece. A shining star was on the rise. Since then, she and her dances have been frequently shown on TV.
　　“I naturally became interested in dance,” said Yang when interviewed. “The Bai people love nature and advocate the essence of life. So, they usually express their affection for nature and life through singing and dancing.” The first time she performed the dance The Soul of the Peacock, Yang said, “I felt as if spiders and elephants were all around me as I stood on top of an earth mound in my hometown.”
　　Yang’s dances boast a lyrical touch, which often abandon trivial realities and meretricious expressions. What’s left in her dances are various moves that form silhouettes of a tree, a fish, a bird, or a snake against the backdrop of a moon as depicted in her dance Moonlight. It is said that Yang, with her dances, invites audiences to journey to a fairyland with blooming flowers, singing birds, and running beasts. She gives life to those creatures with her emotional and expressive body language, and communicates with them.
　　No speech is needed in dance. She rarely separates her everyday life from the world of dance. Yang is a taciturn person, and finds it difficult to communicate with others. When she does speak, she mostly speaks to herself; and what she says usually concerns dance.
　　This is Yang Liping, who lives for dance.

Answer 1

仔细看了，基本没问题。唯一发现的一个小问题就是第二段第11行的那个that之前，不应该有逗号，或者你把它改成which吧。我记得引导定语从句的that之前不能加逗号。其它没问题。

追问

第11行没有that啊~~

追答

好把。我刚才是在手机上看的所以在第二段看到了第11行。应该是第二段第五行：“The Soul of the Peacock, that she choreographed and performed herself”。有逗号就是非限定定语从句，只能用which了。

Answer 2

没有，仔细看过，至少我没发现什么错的

Answer 3

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