一篇英语作文,感觉有些语病,能不能帮忙检查修改一下

In the world,has no one not known aboutwhat is iphone,what is ipad.There has deeply into out basic lift. This has takeplace of Mircosoft PC system.in this essay,I will go to talking about theadvantages and disadvantages of these mobile application.
First,iphoneand ipad is more easy to carry and thinner. Secocd,To work at outside.it willincrease our work efficiency.Third,these mobile application more beautiful.
However,justas everything has the two sides,it has many bad aspects.on the one hand,it’sexpensive to buy and costly to pay so much money.not everyone can pay back it.onthe other hand,
There are some people to buy it is to crazeto vie with each other.we should not encourage this trend.
Formy opinion,although these electronic products successfully changes our life,butwe must consider it whether or not really need them before to buy it.

你这个我没法给你改,因为每句都不对。所以我只能给你重写了。

Nowadays, there is no one who does not knowwhat iPhone or iPad is. These products influence our life deeply and even replacedthe Microsoft PC system. The essay focuses on the advantages and disadvantagesof these mobile applications.

The strong points are easy to see. First,iPhone and iPad are very thin, so they are much easier to carry, especially forpeople working outside. Second, the user-friendly applications can increase ourworking efficiency greatly. Apple designed many short-cuts methods to make theproducts more convenient to use. Third, the appearance of the products is verymodern, which cater the young people’s taste.

On the other hand, we cannot deny thatApple products have their own flaws. The very high price makes the products unaffordablefor many people, so having an iPhone or iPad turns to be a show-off thing. Thisabnormal phenomenon increases the desire of luxury goods among young people.

From my opinion, though these fancy electronicproducts make our life easier, whether we buy them or not still depends on ourreal needs.
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