帮忙修改一下英语作文

Question

我今天写了篇英语作文，想请各位高手给我改改！谢谢！
作文题目：
1、目前网上购物很流行；
2、网上购物有利有弊；
3、我的看法
As we all know,with the rapid development of computers,more and more people like using computers to do anything what they like.Such as,play computer games,shopping online and so on.Recently,shopping online became more and more popular in our lives.Many people begin to shopping online to instead of go shopping.
However shopping online can give us not noly good things but also bad things.Nowadays,some people always said that they can't know the material of the goods which they bought on the Internet.consequencely,they may get some goods of bad quality.And the goods they bought on the Internet usually has no quality assurance.
From my point of view,shopping online is so convenience for us.No matter when,we can anything we want.But we must pay attention to the safety and quality of the goods we bought online.

Answer 1

1.信的开头
To
all
the
students后面应该是，（逗号）不是；（分号）
2.thanks
to
后面接的是名词性短语或是动名词形式的短语，不能加句子。你第二段的“Thanks
to
youmthe
more
trees
are
protected”，明显错误，应该是笔误吧，为“Thanks
to
you，the
more
trees
are
protected”
3.还是“Thanks
to
you，the
more
trees
are
protected,the
better
environment
will
become.”这一句，这一句变成有两个谓语动词，错误。应该在两个分句间加个并列连词and。而且也没有environment
will
become这种说法吧？！如果改用形成可能会更好。另外，个人觉得前面的树木得到保护，谓语动词时态改为将来时比较好“will
be
protected”
4.倒数第二句，vonvenient，什么东东啊？你是想写convenient吗？可是这样一来语境又不对了。为什么做笔记对学生来说很方便啊？而且做笔记关节约资源什么事？
5.最后一句，是devote
不是devot
悬赏分和额外20分奖励。

Answer 2

我是过来拜读的！
不过，我想如果要修改的话，估计要在结构上作很大变动哦。

Answer 3

good good study

Answer 4

这个给你~\(≥▽≤)/~啦啦啦。
There is little that any online, also hard to distinguish authenticity. Can find sb online shopping, throwing, try, have certain risks, and may also have the good things out to cheap, his decision. But consider store discounted buy big stores, when not regularly have some discount, the return of activities you can watch. If you are too expensive, work hard!

Although not JACK&JONES world famous brand, but only in shopping malls and franchise store to buy is quality goods. Other channel purchase is imitated. But can consider to buy, the most number of brand discount store, old old, plenty of imperfection. Eat your cake and have it!

There are a lot of fake and JACK&JONES quality is good, but if you want to know whether the real thing, and ordinary clothes were compared, the average size JACK&JONES pants length size from 28-38 are partial long, low waist designs, many washed clothes than ordinary sleeves, and code. JACK&JONES and partial indeed many manufactured in China.

1 the names, but there JACK&JONES outside will have 2 marks and 2 above, the paper is a LOGO marking, another is the price tag and product specifications, few have three or four standard.
2, the product description of the paper on the price and security code is printed on paper, but a single post, off the single post, below is a plastic, we saw all the copy of the anti-counterfeiting code OJACK&JONES product is printed on paper label, this is a little detail, many people are not noticed, but is very important, because the shop sells a garment, and each retained an anti-counterfeiting code is needed, convenience to tear purchase-sell-stock bookkeeping, convenient, so when JACK&JONES standard are single tear. If not, then must be imitated.
3, generally, the clothes will have buttons in a small bag marks on the bags, buttons, pure wool is spare clothing will have let customer verification of silk, also in bag inside, but a few cases second might not have.
4 and the names of JACK&JONES generally a design should not exceed 3 colors, if you see three colors above even six or seven colors of how VEROMODA, clothing, must be imitated.
5 and JACK&JONES is not all code, namely the English, it points FreeSize yards from XS, except to XL, if there are parts of the code, so don't doubt it clothes is imitated.
Six, don't believe what the original list, foreign trade, JACK&JONES in the world are OEM factory, basic neither nor import, export scarcely any original list. As the original list (ODM) although just sent a letter, but the latter is 100% imitation of the product.
7 and verify names, the best way is to get the shop to check!